The Stars and the Cookie Jar

Hey, y'all, I re-did the ending of my book. This is only the very, very ending -- I'm still working on some transitions in the scene itself - but comment, please. Please comment.

( The End. Cut for so many reasons. Short, I promise.  )

This is the blending of what I wanted to retain from the first draft, and what I learned from Ms. Simaite. Does it work? Or does it have the fictional equivalent of mange?

( 2407 wds. Some old words, Some new ones. What do you think?  )