4:30 Am. Day off. Scheduled opener in emergency room.
I haven't even gone to bed yet, because I was writing, because I was counting on a day off.
first person who crosses me today had better mind their gods-damned merchandise, because I'm in a shredding temper.
36 hours no sleep.
Here, have a Raissa cookie.
"Which of you is Katriel?"
He took Fayge's hand in his; hers was small, and very white, with darker lines where dust had stuck to the currant jam. His fingernails were finer. He raised Fayge's hand as if to carry it to his heart, and no one spoke.
"Tell me, who is Katriel?"
Into the long silence, a scream; Fayge's forehead damp and rain-colorless, and no other sound from her, no moan, no whimper, but he had snapped her smallest finger.
"Is Katriel here?" He asked again.
Raissa looked at the desk, and at Fayge, and then at Murer. She pushed back her chair, and stood up. "I have been known by that name, sir," she said.
Murer threw Fayge to one side, and the desk to the other. It skidded over the lip of the stage and crashed in the dark of the pit. Nothing was between them, now, and Raissa stood in her patched jacket, barefoot, and tried not to flinch.
"Do you have a real name, Jew-girl, or would you rather die as Katriel?"
There was a low sound, like wind over stones, as the actors and the orchestra heard him speak. Raissa heard a bird beating against a window, a mouse broken by the kitchen cat; a noise from her lips, or Fayge's.
"My name is Gellerman," she replied. "Raissa Sylvie Markiewics Gellerman."
He caught her one simple, stunning blow to the shoulder, and she landed on her back with an inkwell crushed beneath her. Lying amongst ink and glass and paper she groaned.
"Get up, girl," said Murer, "and bring me a box."
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The constant reuse and reinvention of names in the Vilna Stories fascinates me. Sometimes (as with Ariel Markiewics--who? Oh, that's Violeta) it gets a bit confusing, and I think you might want to mention that Raissa uses the pen name Katriel for satire somewhere earlier. But... yes, fascinating.
Already this version of Raissa's death is working better than the earlier one you had, by the way.
Umm, good luck at work today.
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I think the thing with Raissa affecting Violeta's last name as part of her own is just too weird to be really clear, and since this is the first and only time she uses it in the text, it's easy to take away. I liked it in the draft this morning; I don't care for it on the re-read.
The Yugn-Vilne writers usually styled themselves three or four different ways depending on whether they were journalling, publishing, entering contests or writing hard, revolutionary, summary-execution-for-this pieces. Abraham Sutzkeyver, for instance, was 'Sutzkeyver', 'Abrasha', and 'The Plum', just as [Ariel] Stern is 'The Star' and Katriel is 'The Kitten'. I'm sure there are in-jokes attached to the names. I think I need to write that scene now, except I fear Fayge would become St. Basilisa Backstory listening to the others speak.
So. Yeah. It came at me for four hours last night, I hope it's better than whatever I'd written before. :)
Thanks.